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A Fine Thing – Stream of Consciousness Saturday #SoCS

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Gemma sat at a table near the back of the pub, staring at a notepad and tapping her lips with her pencil as she thought. A glass of beer sat untouched beside her.

Mac spotted her from the bar, walked over, and sat down uninvited across from her. “You are one fine lookin’ woman,” he said with a grin, setting his glass of beer down heavily and sloshing a little over the rim onto the table. “Finest I ever seen.  It oughta be illegal for someone to look so good.”

Gemma looked up from her notepad and frowned slightly, a little perturbed by the disruption. “That is the finest pickup line I’ve ever heard,” she replied, the heavy sarcasm in her voice making him flinch a little. “The grammar in it should be illegal.” She reached into her purse and pulled out a toy police badge, which she set on the table. “As luck would have it, I’m a member of the grammar police, and I say it is illegal. I’m afraid I’m going to have to fine you for it.”

“What? Fine me? For bad grammar?”

“Yes.”

“You can do that?”

“Yes.”

“Well, what’s the fine,then?”

She looked him up and down for a moment. Aside from the bad grammar, he seemed attractive enough. “How about dinner?”

Mac blinked briefly in surprise, then smiled. “Fine.”


This short story is part of the Stream of Consciousness Saturday, “fine”:

The Friday Reminder and Prompt for #SoCS March 3/18

Author: jowensauthor

I'm a geeky, animal/cat-loving author of Fantasy and YA Fiction. I'm a supporter of animal charities such as the WWF. I'm also a fan of anime and sci-fi/fantasy. I'm an avid reader as well, and enjoy mainly reading fantasies, mysteries, and books about animals. I have a B.A. in History with a minor in English. I also dabble in making jewelry, reading tarot, and am interested in the paranormal. You can find out more about me and my various books and writings at my website: http://jeanneowens.weebly.com. You can also find me on Facebook, Google+, Tumblr, Twitter, Goodreads, and Pinterest.

9 thoughts on “A Fine Thing – Stream of Consciousness Saturday #SoCS

  1. Stream of consciousness is mastered by James Joyce and a tough thing to do but I think you did quite well! 🙂

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  2. Great job! Please check my writing 🙂 I need feedback from good writers like you. It’s very short : https://thebiligualwriter.com. I will follow back if you want me to.

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  3. I love how well the prompt has been used. Great write-up!

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  4. Inspired by your post, I was tempted to try my hand at #fine as well. This is my first ever #SoCS based write-up. Tell me what you think of it,please? https://thatswhatshesaid169.wordpress.com/2018/03/06/no-second-chances/

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